What is your thought on this? its kind of long but?!
Question: Another factor in the spread of AIDS in Southern Africa is the lack of female empowerment and the extreme dominance of males in the society. Most females in Southern Africa traditionally do not stand up for their rights, including in sexual matters. They do not know how to negotiate for what they want. For example, men rarely want to use any sort of birth control, such as a condom. In fact, it has been found that about 80% of Swazi people age 15 and up know about condoms, but only about 30% actually use them. If a woman insisted on her husband using a condom, he would likely beat her; she would be insinuating that he had been unfaithful to her....which he probably had! Also, many men feel like they have a right to beat or rape their women, and many also feel like they have a right to sexually abuse or rape their children or nieces. In fact, it is common for men to feel that they have the right to have sex with whomever they want to, whether or not the other party consents.
Answers: Another factor in the spread of AIDS in Southern Africa is the lack of female empowerment and the extreme dominance of males in the society. Most females in Southern Africa traditionally do not stand up for their rights, including in sexual matters. They do not know how to negotiate for what they want. For example, men rarely want to use any sort of birth control, such as a condom. In fact, it has been found that about 80% of Swazi people age 15 and up know about condoms, but only about 30% actually use them. If a woman insisted on her husband using a condom, he would likely beat her; she would be insinuating that he had been unfaithful to her....which he probably had! Also, many men feel like they have a right to beat or rape their women, and many also feel like they have a right to sexually abuse or rape their children or nieces. In fact, it is common for men to feel that they have the right to have sex with whomever they want to, whether or not the other party consents.
It's their culture. Like in Thailand it is acceptable to 'sell' your daughter into prostitution at age 10 or 12. Or to mutilate the genitals of a woman in some cultures...or to eat dogs in other cultures.
It IS sad.
I would state, women do not have the right, rather than to say, do not stand up for their rights. I believe, it is more accurate description of the condition. You could also say, "women are not aware that they have the right to...."
Also, avoid the use of word "like" in essays unless you are actually comparing something. Instead of saying "men feel like they have a right to..." simply say "men feel they have a right to..." Same meaning, more concise and professional.
I would also suggest you'd remove "...which he probably had!" as this is a wild guess on your part and you is not supported by facts. (you are probably right, but it doesn't have a part in essays)