What do you think? is this good? ?!


Question: What do you think!? is this good!? !?
i was really bored in school so i wrote this:

OPEN DOOR

The day i let you in
the chance i gave you to take control
when i opened the door to you
and you walked right in
was when my house came crashing down

You fed me lied in the morning
telling me i was to fat and pathetic to eat
you carried me through the day
just living in the motions not the moments
at night you would call me names
pressure would rise and my stomach would fill

you walk me to the bathroom
lock the door, turn on the radio to drown the noise
bend over the toilet, stick 3 fingers in
the pressures and guilt would not be there
as my stomach begins to shrink and
the acid burns my throat!. i dont feel anything anymore
just like you wanted!.
when you are satisfied!. i fluse it all down!.
clean the vomit of the wall and porcelain pot

Soon enough i would repeat the purge
not enough strength to stop the urge
without you i am lost!. you guide me though the day
Not knowing when the day will come when i shut the door to you!.
it may be to late and i will close the door on my own life!.





im a sophomore in highschool!.
i wrote this about my life with bulimia Www@Answer-Health@Com


Answers:
some spelling and grammar errors that should easily be fixed!.capitalization missing in several places!.no real flow either!.Www@Answer-Health@Com

I think it is very good!Www@Answer-Health@Com





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