A poem? what do you think?!


Question:

A poem? what do you think?

If you can understand it, especially the last line, then congrats, coz i think it makes no sense - particularly the last line - made sense to me then after writing it i realised that actually it didn't. but i don't know what to change it to.

The line was drawn,
You ignored it,
So i replaced it sevenfold upon me.
Strawberry gashes bleed me,
A scarlet map of pain.

Find the lines,
Find my veins,
Then cut them with my pain.
Red emotion dripping out
Blood and tears mix again.
That's all i'm worth, this pain.

Slicing flesh
And shredding hearts,
This blackened hell's torn me apart.
But there's beauty in this pain,
Poppies flower at wounds again.

Additional Details

3 weeks ago
i wanted to post this in mental health, but for some reason it wouldn't let me.

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3 weeks ago
i love piano - why do you think? have you seen any of my previous questions and answers?

3 weeks ago
Babenco - no not really. but that ain't gonna change any time soon.

Kay - yep i wrote it.

3 weeks ago
Melode - good idea but that's not at all what i meant. i don't agree with drugs.

3 weeks ago
tenseblackbook - get lost. i'm not an attention seeker, i am not doing this for attention, i just want opinions on the poem you moron! and get your facts right - most people DO NOT cut for attention, most people hide the cuts. Stop f*cking judging - you don't even know me, or the other self harmers that you like to judge.


Answers:

I love it!...
Alot of people dont understand these sort of things but this poem goes deep into the explanation!...The way the words express the feelings grab the attention and the emotions of the reader...
And as for the last line it does make sense...It enlightens the ending of the poem in a strange way!
Great poet!!!...
And i would just like to say that the people who label "self-harmers" as attention seekers are ignorant and extremely narrow minded...These are the people that society shouldnt have time for...
Take care x Stay safe :)




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